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英语六级作文分类 比较对照预测范文及点评 20:农村留守儿童

Topic 20 Left-behind Children in the Countryside

留守儿童的现象在农村非常普遍

这种现象带来的弊端

我认为该如何处理这些问题

Left-behind Children in the Countryside

At present, the phenomenon of left-behind children is becoming unprecedentedly visible in China. According to a recent survey con-ducted by CCTV, the past five years has witnessed a sharp increase in the number of left-behind children to an astonishing number of 3,240,000.
It goes without saying that there are many disadvantages. To begin with, left-behind children are not taken good care of by their parentsbecause of the distance. Therefore, many of them are rather weak physically and psychologically. Whafs more, they are easily led astray due to the absence of parental love and guidance, even being lured to commit crimes.
As far as I am concerned, measures should be taken to solve the problem. People should endeavor to offer love and concern to these children. The parents in particular should not make money at the sacri-fice of ignorance of their children. Also, policies should be implemen-ted so that left-behind children from countryside can have equal access to educational opportunities,medical care and other services with other children. (168) 

一句话点评

很显然,第一段的大写字母和数据能迅速抓住阅卷老师的眼 球。同时使用了 witness, sharp等好词,以及the past five years作主 语的修辞手法,无疑增加了文章的亮点。

快捷构思

第一段:直接提出该段中心“留守儿童的现象在农村非常普 遍”。而后,“一句话”更加形象地说明最近五年留守 儿童的数量很多。
第二段:模板句提出该段主题句“这种现象带来的弊端”。紧 接着列出 了两种弊端:are not taken good care of by their parents 和 easily led astray due to the absence of parental love and guidance 0
第三段:直接展现该段中心“我认为该如何处理这些问题”。 分别从大众、家长等角度给出解决问题的办法。

美丽词句

1.left-behind children 留守儿童

2.unprecedentedly 史无前例地 lured to 被吸引

3.endeavor to 努力,尝试

4.at the sacrifice of ignorance of their children 以忽略孩子为代价