Topic 18 My View on Owning Private Cars in China
My View on Owning Private Cars in China
Nowadays，more and more people own private cars. According to a recent survey conducted by CCTV, the past 5 years has wit-nessed a sharp increase in the number of private cars to an aston-ishing number of 175,280,000.
To account for this phenomenon, people have come up with vari-ous reasons listed below. To begin with, there has been great improve-ment in people’s living standards in the past decade. Thus, many peo-ple choose more comfortable means of traveling over bicycles or motor-cycles. What’s more，to enjoy in the open-air by short journey at week-ends is becoming a fashion especially among young people, which to a large extent stimulates a boom of private car.
However, private cars also sive rise to a number of problems. On the one hand，with so many cars running on street，traffic jams appeared and accident increased. On the other hand，people are start-ing to complain of the smoke and pollution given off by cars. (157 词）
该句中的数据以及大写字母CCTV首先吸引阅卷老师的眼球,同时 conduct, a sharp increase, to an astonishing number of 等单词及 短语的使用极大地增加了该句的亮点。
第二段:分析产生这种现象的原因，分别以To begin with和 What’s more来引出，条理相当清晰，而且分析原因也 很透彻。
第三段:首先概括性地指出这种现象会引起一些问题;接着分 别用 On the one hand 和 On the other hand 来具体引出 可能会产生的两方面的影响。
1.to a large extent在很大程度上
3.a boom of激增，繁荣
4.give rise to 引起，导致