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英语六级作文分类 比较对照预测范文及点评 15:交通事故

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Topic 15 Traffic Accidents

城市交通事故越来越多

为什么会这样

如何解决这个问题

Traffic Accidents

There tends to be more and more traffic accidents in cities. According to a recent survey conducted by the National Transpor-tation Ministry, Beijing, Shanghai and Guangzhou witnessed respectively a big increase of 37, 34 and 41 percent in traffic acci-dents from 2000 to 2003.

To account for this phenomenon, people have come up with vari-oussociety, more and more people can afford a private car, which gives rise to more traffic congestion and hence more accidents. In addition, an increasing number of drivers do not lay enough emphasis on related traffic rules. We have heard too many news reports about the traffic tragedies resulting from the carelessness or drunkenness of the drivers.

Serious as the problem seems,we can take some measures to deal with it. Drivers should improve their sense of abiding by traffic rules and the government should put some limitations on the increase of pri-vate cars. (160 词)

一句话点评

第一段的数据、大写字母等将吸引阅卷老师的眼球,同时还使 用了 conduct, witness respectively 等好词及短语,并以 conduct 引导的分词短语作后置定语,给阅卷老师留下良好的第一印象。

快捷构思

第一段:描述现象,引入该段中心“城市交通事故越来越多”。 而后“一句话”数例说明这种状况的严重性。
第二段:开门见山提出该段主题句“造成城市交通事故越来越 多有多方面的原因”。紧接着用To begin with, In addition引出解释这种状况的两方面原因,条理清晰。 第三段:先总起一句指出“尽管这个问题相当严重,但是我们 可以采取一些措施来解决。”而后,分别从司机和政府 两个方面来指出解决这种状况的途径。

美丽词句

1.respectively各自地,分别地

2.come up with 想出,提出

3.give rise to 引起,导致

4.traffic congestion 交通拥挤