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【雅思写作】雅思犯罪类话题范文及翻译 雅思写作犯罪类话题

来源:慢速英语   时间:2019-12-16 15:57:53

在雅思写作大作文中有一类话题是经常考到的那就是犯罪类话题,同时这类话题也是考生们比较头疼的一类话题,因为大家对这类话题比较陌生,以前基本没有写过,在整个英语考试中出现犯罪类话题的概率也很低,所以大家在遇到犯罪类话题时,往往不知道怎么入手去写,今天就为大家带来一篇范文解析,及犯罪类话题的常用表达,希望对大家有帮助。

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话题:“Some people who have been in prison become good citizens. Some people therefore think that they are the best people to talk to school students the danger of committing a crime. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?”


范文

Many criminals can be reformed people after they serve their time in jail. [习语表达:serve the/somebody’s time] Since their faults have been rectified[原形rectify], I would,if I were a school principal, [故意设计一个虚拟语气,丰富语法现象] invite those ex-criminals to help my teachers foster students’ good behavior.


许多罪犯在监狱服刑后可以改头换面。 由于他们的过错已得到纠正,如果我是学校校长,我会邀请那些前罪犯提供帮助 我的老师培养学生的良好行为。


The primary consideration is that [引导表语从句] those former offenders’ real-life cases are lessons that are more convincing than what an effective teacher could be. Teachers may [在这里不表可能性,表让步] demonstrate numerous examples in their classes; however, those cases may not be as authenti cand compelling as they should be until they are told by an ex-criminal in person. Teachers may[在这里不表可能性,表让步] be role models in behavior; students may however develop no clear awareness of abiding by[abide by the rules unless they actually see the consequences of breaking them.[两个长难句组成此段落的重要内容,注意比较teachers和ex-criminals的对比,是内容设计的关键] Both situations are where[引导名词词组] reformed ex-criminals should be invited into classrooms.


首先要考虑的是,那些前罪犯的真实案例是比有效的老师更令人信服的课程。 教师可以在他们的课堂上示范许多例子。 但是,在被前犯罪分子亲自告知之前,这些案件可能不如应有的那样令人信服。 教师可以[在这里不表可能,表让步] 但是,学生可能没有明确遵守的规则,除非他们实际看到违反规则的后果。[两个长难句组成此后的重要内容,请注意比较老师和犯罪分子的对比,是内容 在两种情况下,都应邀请改革前的罪犯进入教室。


In addition, teachers do not compare with[这个词组用主动语态时意义为“比得上”] ex-criminals for their likely patronizing[原形:patronize or intimidating[原形:intimidate] attitude is undesirable. Those corrected and changed criminals are otherwise humble. When patronized or frightened[原形:frighten], students, young and prone to be rebellious, may be provoked[原形:provoke] and act against rules knowingly. This is a risk that no school would like to take. Instead, a modest attitude is more welcome. Former criminals, unlike teachers, who may act like saints, are regretful about the harm and damage they have caused and thus often adopt a gentle and moderate attitude. [长难句]

[如果可以在body部分设计2-3个长难句,也就2-3个足够了,语言表述部分会有提分]

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此外,教师不喜欢前罪犯,因为他们可能光顾[原形:光顾或恐吓[原形:无辜]的态度。 那些矫正和改变的罪犯则谦虚。 当受到光顾或受到惊吓时,年轻而容易叛逆的学生可能会被激怒并故意违反规则。 这是没有学校愿意承担的风险。 相反,谦虚的态度更受欢迎。 与教师不同,前罪犯可能像圣徒一样,对他们所造成的伤害和损害感到遗憾,因此常常采取温和而温和的态度。


In conclusion, it is an adoptable proposition that[引导主语从句] former offenders who have turned over a new leaf[习语表达:turn over a new leaf] can be good teachers for students learning to behave. Since they have changed, they are safe. Most importantly, they have the potential to outperform professional teachers.

总而言之,[领导语言从句]改过新叶子[习语表达:翻新叶子]可以成为学生学习行为的好老师。 由于它们已更改,因此很安全。 最重要的是,它们具有超越专业老师的潜力。


接下来看一些犯罪类话题的常用表达:

1.先来说说犯罪份子该如何表达

criminals 名词,罪犯(值得注意的是,该词有形容词性)。

offenders 名词,罪犯,违法者。

juvenile criminals 名词,青少年罪犯。


minor criminals 名词,未成年罪犯。

juvenile delinquent / juvenile offender 名词,少年犯,或行为不端的青少年

值得注意的是,其实在雅思写作犯罪类的话题中,未成年人犯罪往往是常见话题。因此后面几个词汇,需要大家重点掌握。


2. 来说说犯罪这件事该如何表达,要注意词性标注commit a crime (commit crimes) 动宾,犯罪

violate the law / break the law 动宾,犯罪,违法

offend against the law 动宾,违法

violent crimes / non-violent crimes 形容词+名词,暴力犯罪/非暴力犯罪


delinquent behaviors / illegal acts / lawless behaviors形容词+名词,不法的行为

juvenile delinquency 名词,特指青少年的不法行为

illegality 名词,泛指所有违法行为。此外,immorality 名词,指的是不道德的行为,其实近似于违法行为,但是略有区别。同理,副词illegally和immorally也是类似的区别

wrongdoing / misconduct / delinquency 名词,都是指的是行为不端


请见如下例文:(青少年违法之后应该如何被惩罚永远是雅思考试的常见话题)

There is no denying that everyone should be punished due to his/her illegality, no matter how old he/she is. Notwithstanding, this does not imply that juvenile culprits should be treated as equally as adult prisoners. Juvenile detentions ought to be the place for those minor offenders instead of common jails, and besides juvenile suspects should be on trial in juvenile court where their right can be protected much better.

Juvenile convicts with violent crimes should be detained in juvenile detentions as they might be potential threats to our society, and on the other hand minor culprits with non-violent crimes can be punished with more flexibility such as being forced to do social work.


PS:Juvenile detentions 名词,少管所

juvenile court 名词,未成年人法庭

detain 及物动词,羁押


3.犯罪率的表达方式

Crime rate / incident of crime

如何降低犯罪率,是经常在雅思写作中被讨论的话题。

Unbelievably high juvenile crime rate is plaguing many countries all over the world, and how to reduce it has become prime task for those governments for a long time.


4.rehabilitate criminals / reform criminals 动宾,改造罪犯

Main function of prisons is not only punishing culprits with locking them up but also rehabilitating them as everyone no matter what he/she has done deserves a second chance. 监狱的功能不仅是限制犯人的自由,还要给这些犯人提供一个改过自新的机会。

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5.几个导致青少年犯罪的原因如下:

Lack of moral education 名词性,缺少德育教育(lack一词在实际写作中是考生们常犯错误的地方,请看后面的注解。)

Inappropriate parenting 名词性,不恰当的家庭教育

Being exposed to misleading information from media 动名词性质,暴露于媒体的诱导性信息

Lack of ability of telling right from wrong 名词性,缺少辨别是非的能力

Blindly imitate what they often see or read in media 动宾结构,盲目模仿在媒体中看到的或者听到的事物


PS:关于lack

首先,可以是及物动词。例如:With stress from exams, students lack enthusiasm on learning any kind of art.

其次,名词,多用于词组 be lack of / be lack in = be short of  例如:Generally speaking, high crime rate, to a great extent, can be attributed to lack of law enforcement capacity of police.

再次,lacking 形容词,常用词组 be lacking of / be lacking in 例如: Fresh graduates are usually lacking in working experience that is required badly on majority of job positions.


16.  Benefit / beneficial / Beneficiary 这几个词汇并不算难, 但是考生对于其词性掌握一直不理想. 在此, 重点强调一下词性.

Benefit 可为名词, 同时也可以为动词, 并且可以是Vt也可以是Vi。请对比下面两个句子。

Governments will enjoy the benefits from their huge investment in education field in a long run.

Governments will benefit from their huge investment in education field in a long run.

第一句中的benefits为名词,后面的from为介词,实则是一个介词短语作为定语修饰前文的benefits。而第二句中,benefit from为一个动词词组,指的是受益于某人或某事。


Beneficial 形容词,通常的词组是 be beneficial to 近义词组 be good for / be salutary to

University education will be definitely beneficial to one’s future career.

Beneficiary, 名词,指的是受益者,受惠者。

Obviously, beneficiaries of dissemination of high-quality education are both individuals and governments.


Beneficence, 名词,指的是善行。其实在一些语境中,它指的含义就是好处。见下例句:

Some people blindly and excessively have their faith in the beneficence of technological advance. 一些人盲目地并且过度地对科技发展带来的好处加以信任。


17. Access 一词在教育类写作中也时常出现。其常见词性有两个。

首先,名词。译为,进入,使用权等。意思比较抽象。通常用于词组have access to, 可使用什么,可接近什么。例如:

Contemporarily, with popularity of internet, schoolchildren can easily have access to some illegal and harmful information that they should not have known.

其次,动词,及物。译为,使用,接近等。例如:

What children can easily access online is what they can never find in their textbooks.


18. 对某人或某事负责,在写作中非常常见。下面给大家几个相关的表达,如下:

Be in charge of doing / sth.

Take charge of doing / sth.

Have/has a duty to do sth.

Have/has an obligation to do sth.

Be responsible for doing sth. / sth.


19. bring the talent and creativity into full play 充分发挥才智与创新 (动宾结构)

在对于课程安排或者是教学方法的评述中,充分发挥才智与创新可以算是其优点。如下:

Given that students are able to apply for courses according to their interest, university education will indeed bring their talent and creativity into full play.


20. 教育系统产出物之一就是人才,如下是几个人才的描述方式:

personnel with interdisciplinary knowledge and well-rounded ability 复合型人才

interdisciplinary talents 夸学科人才

senior personnel / top talents / advanced talents 高级人才

well-educated workforce 受到良好教育的劳动力

high-end labor 高端劳动力


大家通过阅读文章开头的范文应该可以看出这篇范文不论是词汇还是表达,包括整体的内容都是非常有思想的,我们想达到这个水平是非常难的,所以我们的目标不是和范文写的一模一样,而是学习范文写作的思路,知道要从什么角度去写犯罪类话题。其次,关于犯罪的词汇大家也不熟悉,以上的内容大家可以记录背诵。


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